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    Just a quick writing. Please help me to write the thesis statement more specific based on the entire essay. Also, the topic sentences and/or the transitioning between paragraphs, especially the sentences that highlight with the red color (see the attached file below). The first sentence (topic sentence) in each paragraph should give some idea of the material to be covered in the whole paragraph. Please write  a specific thesis and revise only the topic sentences in each paragraph, also add the transitiong words before the topic sentences. You do not need to revise other parts only the topic sentences and the thesis.

    Transition guideline:
    ADDITIONalso, and, besides, furthermore, in addition, indeed, in fact, moreover, so too
    EXAMPLEafter all, as an illustration, for example, for instance, specifically, to take a case in point
    ELABORATIONactually, by extension, in short, that is, in other words, to put it another way, to put it bluntly, to put it succinctly, ultimately
    COMPARISONalong the same lines, in the same way, likewise, similarly
    CONTRASTalthough, but, by contrast, conversely, despite the fact that, even though, however, in contrast, nevertheless, on the contrary, on the other hand, regardless, whereas, while yet
    CAUSE AND EFFECTaccordingly, as a result, consequently, hence, since, so, then, therefore, thus
    CONCESSIONadmittedly, although it is true, granted naturally, of course, to be sure
    CONCLUSIONas a result, consequently, hence, in conclusion, in short, in sum, therefore, thus, to sum up, to summarize

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